by Anya Razmi and Diana Malkin
Anya: We were part of Naomi Shihab Nye’s workshop. Typically, I don’t like writing from prompts, but I really appreciated how open-ended hers were. In this poem, we were asked to write about a memory or something connected to our present selves to our past selves.
eleven years ago
there is a little girl
trembling
on a creaking metal dragon
eleven years ago
she clings to her sister’s chubby fingers
listens to the steel
roar
i want to cradle her
in my arms
i want to rock her
across my sandy shores
eleven years ago
tears coat her face like melted popsicles
sticky
and
aching
she thinks the ride is too big,
too loud,
that the world does not belong
to her yet.
i want to tell her
it’s not so bad
i want to tell her
the world is filled with metal dragons,
with roaring steel
i want to show her
it’s not so bad
being smaller
than your shadow
eleven years ago,
the dragon drops
and her heart leaps
to her stomach
i want to tell her
she’ll feel the same thing
a thousand times
before realizing
it’s not so bad
to let your ribcage crumble,
and your heartbeat quake.
it’s not so bad
to feel life’s sweeping roar
and let your body go,
let it go,
let it go.
Diana: A little while ago, Anya and I went to Naomi Shihab Nye’s writing workshop. It was truly amazing. I loved sharing our work and hearing everyone’s poem. They spoke about their favorite paintings at the art museum to the story of their parents meeting in college for the first time. Everyone had something to add and it was a joy hearing about everyone’s experiences. It was a very accepting and caring environment. Hearing Naomi’s advice was incredibly helpful, because she had inspiring ideas and encouraged everyone to write and share.
Some of the activities we did were:
- Random question flow
- Writing about something that mattered to us
- Childhood story
- A group poem
- Using three words per line (or a “ power poem”)
My poem is called Voice. It is about speaking out.
You wonder loudly
But whisper doubt.
Your voice trembles
And twists alone.
You see light
And reach deep.
You smooth ground
And shattered cracks.
So speak dearest.
Share your wonder.
Overall, Naomi’s workshop was spectacular. She gave insightful advice and taught us to reach deep and share our emotions. I loved receiving feedback from a professional. It is so important to share your writing and hear other people’s recommendations. I did not have the most confidence in my poems, but after hearing everyone’s thoughts, it was significantly easier sharing my work. By the end of the day, I felt enlightened and like a new writer. If you ever have a chance to go to the Writing Workshop, please do (it is definitely worth it)! I hope these poems inspire and motivate you to write about anything that interest you!